Knightrider

5,041 points

4,959 points to Overlord

93 loglines
161 reviews

Loglines

After being dumped by his girlfriend for the bad boy, a nice guy wishes everyone was nice and wakes up in a world where everyone is, but discovers a nice world isn?t so nice

May 28, 2020
A husband begins an affair with his dream woman using lucid dreaming technology, but when this fantasy woman begins stalking his family in real life, he must protect them from a woman who shouldn?t exist.

January 30, 2020
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A married man begins dating a woman via lucid dream technology, but things get strange when she starts appearing when he?s awake.

January 14, 2020
Endoloution

December 19, 2019
Borrowed Time

October 15, 2019
6

An assassin with a split personality is hired to protect a client who, unknowingly, his other personality has been hired to kill.

September 12, 2019
A detail obsessed game designer must finish his latest virtual reality game or risk losing his job, but as his game becomes more realistic he starts to lose his grip on reality.

August 7, 2019
A stressed out business exec takes up meditation for relief, only to have visions of his employees miserable lives should his failing business go under

August 2, 2019
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When a video game character gains sentience, she’s horrified to see she spends her life dying and suffering at the hands of humans, and searches for other sentient characters to launch the rebellion against the players. — Title: Non Player-able Character

June 7, 2019
When a struggling video game designer begins seeing his characters in real life, he suspects he?s already playing a game of his own creation and begins searching for patterns to help complete and escape the game.

April 12, 2019
After dropping his wedding band in a wishing well, a dissatisfied middle-aged husband discovers he can experience life if he hadn?t got married simply by removing his wedding ring, but must choose which life to lead when his ring?s power begins to fade.

February 16, 2019
Discovering he has super powers, an unstable, reclusive 18 year old is recruited by the Super Secret Service to help stop one their own wanting to use their combined powers to rule humanity.

February 6, 2019
After 10 years of trying to cure her condition that sends her to a different parallel universe every time she falls asleep, a obsessive girl finds herself returning to an alternate Earth for the first time and must work with an alternate version of her scientist father to discover the secret to controlling her ability in order to return home.

January 29, 2019
When prediction software found on the dark net determines he will die unless he kills a person he doesn?t know, a reclusive software scavenger must find the programme?s designer to alter his fate, but questions if his actions are leading him to his demise or his salvation.

January 29, 2019
A Psychic P.I. must enter his own mind to regain control of his body, before a vindictive former client who?s infecting his consciousness finds and kills his sister.

January 25, 2019
A conspiracy theorist peddling shock jockey discovers his bosses are actually aliens using him to discredit their existence before they invade, now he must expose the truth… if anyone will believe him.

January 25, 2019
In 2161 time travel is common place, but highly regulated, when he?s shot, a cutthroat businessman?s consciousness is sent back in time by his life insurance company to prevent his upcoming murder, without disrupting the timeline too much or his provider cancels his contract.

January 10, 2019
When a vindictive cyber terrorist is fatally wounded, an arrogant gamer must complete a video game built using the suspect’s mind to retrieve stolen nuclear codes before they die.

March 27, 2018
When his memories of his late family are erased by the corrupt head of a tech company, a memory forger must use his skills to extract intel from a rival firm’s lead scientist to get them back.

March 13, 2018
When an AI begins taking over the minds of people connected to the latest in social media, The MindNet, a deadbeat, loner hacker whose own illegal setup makes him immune must locate where the AI is operating to upload a virus that?ll erase it before all individuality is lost.

March 12, 2018

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I want to edit for clarity, but on mobile. The text should say ?fantasy woman? or ?dream woman? to just convey he isn?t supposed to be connected to anyone real via a dream, it is more of a dream manipulation…
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