When a pioneering kidney patient is confronted by a God-Committee reject, he takes on Washington to make life-saving dialysis treatments universally available.

Let me clarify my SOP when it comes to writing loglines for myself and suggesting loglines for others:

I personally write two loglines for my projects. The first is for mine eyes only, the second is for marketing the script to other pairs of eye balls.

The "Mine Eyes Only" only version must conform to? the formula . Because the formula forces me to organize the script, nail down the essential elements of the plot. I'm not ready to write the first draft of a script until I've written a "Mine Eyes Only" version.

For that reason, I strongly encourage folks to first write a "formula" version of the logline. It's not easy, but it is necessary.

I may not sweat the "Other Eye Balls", the marketing version, until after I have done at least one draft of the script. In my experience, I discover the best hook for marketing the story in the process of writing? a first (aka: "vomit") draft. Or second... or third... or...

Now it may turn out that the plotting logline is good enough to do double duty as the marketing logline. But it is my experience and observation that one dual-purpose logline is not always feasible.

So on this website, my m.o. is to dig out a story hook for a marketing logline as well as offering suggestions for a "formula" logline (to organize the plot).

To repeat: I? advise working up two versions of your logline for your projects, on? for plotting, one for marketing.

My? 2.5 cents worth.

Let me clarify my SOP when it comes to writing loglines for myself and suggesting loglines for others:

I personally write two loglines for my projects. The first is for mine eyes only, the second is for marketing the script to other pairs of eye balls.

The "Mine Eyes Only" only version must conform to? the formula . Because the formula forces me to organize the script, nail down the essential elements of the plot. I'm not ready to write the first draft of a script until I've written a "Mine Eyes Only" version.

For that reason, I strongly encourage folks to first write a "formula" version of the logline. It's not easy, but it is necessary.

I may not sweat the "Other Eye Balls", the marketing version, until after I have done at least one draft of the script. In my experience, I discover the best hook for marketing the story in the process of writing? a first (aka: "vomit") draft. Or second... or third... or...

Now it may turn out that the plotting logline is good enough to do double duty as the marketing logline. But it is my experience and observation that one dual-purpose logline is not always feasible.

So on this website, my m.o. is to dig out a story hook for a marketing logline as well as offering suggestions for a "formula" logline (to organize the plot).

To repeat: I? advise working up two versions of your logline for your projects, on? for plotting, one for marketing.

My? 2.5 cents worth.

Robb Ross raises a valid point.

IMHO, even if the dialysis event occurs in? Act 3, it's the story hook in terms of the logline.? It's a trailer moment.? It's the logline element? most likely to? generate interest in reading the script (which is the objective goal of a logline).? ?People will? be curious to? know the sequence of events that drove him to such a dramatic display of his plight, of the life-or-death plight of so many kidney patients.

I am a strong advocate of the standard formula explained under the "Our Formula" link at the top of the page.? But if you're a wannabe writer, with no track record of script sales, no agent, no contacts in the industry the most important element in your logline is the story hook.? Period.

New paragraph.

How else is your script going to get? attention, stand out from the 10's of thousands of other scripts that are put into play every year?