When a penniless young writer steals a suitcase full of dirty money a street enforcer from Japan is sent to track him down and an epic struggle begins on the streets of East London.

Thanks, Nick. Penniless is why he steals the suitcase and yes it does fall into his lap, it's not a heist. Also, a writer has imagination and mental fortitude and intelligence so it's an interesting match up against a streetwise and vicious fish-out-of-water heavy.

And what makes it epic? The stakes. Circumstances lead the writer to give the money to a worthy cause and eventually sacrifice his life to save his friends from the enforcer's wrath. Plus, the enforcer owes a debt of honour which demands he kill himself if he fails his mission.

Truth be told, there's a lot of genre-busting elements hard to include in a logline so I intend to include a short synopsis with any pitch.

Firstly, I like this action story. It has a fish out of water enforcer, bringing his Eastern kick ass to the streets of East London.

I would review the following items:

'penniless young writer' - How does him being a writer add to the story and action? Example, if he was a bricklayer, there is working class desperation, and he has muscle.

'steals a suitcase' - Did it fall in his lap? Or was it a heist?

'epic struggle' - What makes the struggle epic? A fight between a writer and a Japanese bad ass doesn't evoke this.

Let me start by saying that I really like this action story. It has balls, it promises a culture clash between the Japanese enforcer and whoever he has to deal with on the streets of London, as well as the Eastern style of dispatching bad guys.

I would consider revising the following:

penniless young writer - Is being a writer the best kind of function to give the protagonist? Even if he was a brickie's labourer, it conveys muscle, and low class desperation.

steals a suitcase - Define whether it fell in his lap or if it was a heist

epic struggle - On first read I liked the use of 'epic struggle'... But it's hollow because I don't know who the struggle is between (I assume the writer and the enforcer), or how it will be epic.