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There does need to be a driving factor, a goal. Getting back your self worth is an outcome not really a goal.
You should make the goal more immediate. Someone he loves is in danger and he must save them.
Are the detective and failed parent the same person? I assume so, because you'd have phrased it as *a* failed parent if they're two different people. I'd also specify whether it's a police detective, PI, federal investigator, or some other kind of detective.