When a man wakes up in an unfamiliar bar with no memories, he is compelled to solve the mystery and reconsider his own relationship with death.

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torgodog Logliner · 351 pts ★ Accepted

When a man wakes up with no memories in the world where people interact through a game of Rock. Paper. Scissors. , he must solve the mystery of his predicament and consider his relationship with death.

torgodog Logliner · 351 pts

Does refer to the movie already made.

"When a man wakes up with no memories in the world where people interact through a game of Rock. Paper. Scissors. , he must solve the mystery of his predicament."

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

>>>Consider his relationship with? death?

Vague, needs clarity. Specifically, what does that mean in terms of what he must do?

And a plot is organized around one prime objective goal.? Not two.? Just one.? A logline is about the struggle to achieve that one goal. All other goals are secondary and subordinate to the prime goal -- and extraneous to a loglne.

So what is his singular primary goal: solve the mystery or "consider his relationship with death" (whatever that means)?

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And does this refer to a movie already made?? Because that's what? "examples" are for.

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torgodog Logliner · 351 pts

When a man wakes up in world where people communicate through a game of Rock, Paper, Scissors, he is compelled to solve the mystery and reconsider?his relationship with death.

Trix Mentor · 2,991 pts

A couple of thoughts I hope are useful:

  • Do you need 'unfamiliar' bar if he's lost his memory?
  • 'his own relationship with death' sounds like the emphasis is on 'own' - if so, why? Who else is there? And how does getting his memory back relate to his mortality?
firstjack1 Penpusher · 66 pts

So, Memento? Also I'm struggling with "relationship with death"... doesn't really mean anything to me on its own.