When a dangerous CME is earthbound, and a satellite reflector won’t work, NASA, learning they have four days till impact, release a female hacker from prison, to find the problem and save the planet.

5 reviews

KW Samurai · 856 pts

I really like this!

My one gripe would be that I feel the female hacker should be more notorious or something, otherwise, I just don't buy that NASA would turn to her. She'd really must have a greater background to make her more essential to the plot (perhaps she worked for NASA designing the system before she was jailed in disgrace for hacking.)

Yes, it's true that the whole 'bad guy called in to save the earth' has been done a lot, but no reason you can't do a fresh take on it. The concept oozes with possible conflict. Does she have a scorned ex-lover at NASA? Does she have a secret criminal agenda she's covertly trying to pull? All these things and more make me intrigued. I'd see this movie.

Solace1016 Logliner · 476 pts

This has great potential! I'd like to vest immediately in your protagonist and why this is uniquely her story.? By way of an over the top, wacky example: Wrongfully convicted of hacking NASA, a pregnant scientist is released from prison to stop an extinction level event from destroying Earth in four days time. Keep working on it!

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

I, too, had to? google the acronym, something a logline should not make a reader have to do.

And, as the others, said, the visual aspect in terms of the action of the protagonist? are weak.

There are also technical issues which, in my mind, elevate the story to the genre of sci-fi, not mere drama.