When a criminal investigation threatens her wealthy estate, a selfish woman places it in a charitable foundation run by her na?ve, unhinged colleague and attempts to maintain control without her knowledge. (Sitcom)

3 reviews

Foxtrot25 Summitry · 17,380 pts

I also assume that the authorities are working to become wise to her and pursue them both? One thing about Government, they are good at following?the trail of money.

pedrots Penpusher · 51 pts

Confused. She transferred her complete estate to the foundation? That'd make little sense financially wise.

Also her COLLEAGUE runs the foundation? wouldn't it be her EMPLOYEE then? assuming?the protag?chairs the Foundation Board.

Foxtrot25 Summitry · 17,380 pts

Paul,

Confused about this. She places the entire estate, not just cash into a charitable foundation? If she is the protagonist and also a criminal, why would we want to root for her to maintain control?

Is the charity friend the Protagonist? If so, you need to rewrite this to reflect that.

Otherwise, sounds like a fresh story with potential.