4 reviews
The latest draft of the logline lacks a clear cause and effect relationship between the inciting incident and goal.
Ask yourself: how does one event motivate the other?
Agreed, with above comments, how does the murder of the billionaire relate to the lead character?
Yet still, what is the connection between an innocent billionaire getting killed and your anti hero, the assassin?
Going from a hitman to an army ranger is quite a drastic change. What prompted that?