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Thanks for the feedback. Humanity needs to be saved from the AI. This was the next edit.
After a programming error a troubled AI developer struggles to find their own humanity and teach their flawed AI the values of life so it does not destroy the world they intended for it to save.
P.S. Also, save the world from what? The world needs a lot of saving from a lot of problems.
A logline should be a rifle, not a shotgun. That is, it should fire one bullet (singularity and unity of action) aimed at the bulls eye of a specific target (one well-defined, specific objective goal). It should not be a shotgun blasting widely scattered buckshot in the general direction of some unstated target.
In the story world of this logline, what does humanity need to be saved from?
While I am well aware of the trend toward gender neutral pronouns, loglines should indicate the gender of the protagonist because casting a movie is not a gender neutral exercise.
Thanks for the feedback. Didn't realize the AI scientist was confusing. Yes, was trying to be gender-less. Here's the update I'm thinking about:
After a programming error a troubled, arrogant AI developer struggles to find their own humanity and stop their flawed AI from destroying the world they intended for it to save.
This is a little confusing, is the AI scientist an AI himself? That seems weird. Or is he a scientist who programs AI's?
Also, you say 'an' AI scientist, then later you say 'their', which is plural, so is there more than one scientist or are you simply using a genderless pronoun? it's confusing.
I'm going to try to decipher this and come up with a logline, but I will probably be a little off:
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"When the AI he created attempts to destroy the world, a programmer must reason with artificial brain by arguing the good of humanity, in hopes of stopping its genocidal plans."