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• on Three outcast friends lead their town’s residents on a perilous journey to save them from terrorists who scheme to enslave their women for the sex trade

  I like the idea of 3 childhood friends who were "bad boys" who are now challenged w/ doing the right thing. Can you add some detail about their reputation. And why do the terrorist attack a small town? What's their…

• on After a programming error a troubled AI developer is trapped in a lab as they struggle to teach their flawed AI the value of human life, and find their own humanity, so the AI does not destroy the world they intended for it to save.

  Thanks for the feedback. Humanity needs to be saved from the AI. This was the next edit. After a programming error a troubled AI developer struggles to find their own humanity and teach their flawed AI the values of life…

• on After a programming error a troubled AI developer is trapped in a lab as they struggle to teach their flawed AI the value of human life, and find their own humanity, so the AI does not destroy the world they intended for it to save.

  Thanks for the feedback. Didn't realize the AI scientist was confusing. Yes, was trying to be gender-less. Here's the update I'm thinking about: After a programming error a troubled, arrogant AI developer struggles to find their own humanity and stop…

• on When a self proclaimed DJ chases after power and notoriety, with the help of her best friend and mentor, she must try to keep her thrown in tact from the enviousness of another DJ even if that means going beyond her moral beliefs.

  Sounds good. Wonder if you can shorten it. Maybe leave out the middle piece between the commas. And add some detail about the moral challenge.