Thwarted at every attempt to win over the girl of his dreams, an awkward boy (8) has to overcome his deepest fear to draw her into a magical world.

Thanks dpg. I did watch 'Moonrise Kingdom' and absolutely loved it! But the feelings between those two main characters go so much further than where my script has gone. Sex isn't remotely on his brain. The boy in my script doesn't think further than: I don't know why i like her, but i like being with her! He is a very different boy. Even so, since these posts, I have been more aware of what happens between sexes at that age. it stems from the same vein as girl hating boys and boys hating girls- especially the ones they really like! My lead character is just different enough not to swim with the stream. Thanks so much for your input. Good or bad, I need feedback from potential audience members out there, so thanks for being honest! ;-)

Thanks JBalmer, your logline was actually the one that did help me the most. It's simple and to the point. cheers

Carmen:
>>that men (not all!) don?t really remember feeling anything at that age...

Even though puberty kicks in so much earlier now, I think it is still the case that for most 8-year old boys girls are not their top priorities. It's a little too early for those kind of feelings you story seeks to portray to kick in. (I speak as a member of the guy species in that regard.)

With regard to issue of unoriginality -- mea culpa, my initial response -- you are correct that falling in love is a universal experience. And the trick is coming up with a novel twist, a new perspective. Based upon your clarification, I would say you seem to have a different slant. But as I said, I not sure how credible it is, given the facts of biological maturation.

Can the kid (and the girl) be a few years older, both on the cusp of puberty?

Or why not reverse roles? Could the girl notice the boy that way and part of the complication is he's too busy climbing trees, skate boarding, playing video games -- doing young guy things -- to notice or understand?

That said: rules were made to be broken. So if you can draw out of the experience of your own son a story that is fresh and unique and true to our emotional lives -- more power to you.

BTW: I like the complication of the kid having to get past the gatekeepers of her older brothers. Oh man, oh boy, does that ring true to experience!