The story about the ghost of a 5-year-old who will not rest until her mother gets justice, finds love and lives happily ever after.

Obviously my example above needs your antagonist slotted in at 'an unjust cause'! ;-)

Hi Mike,

Yes, I also think you should outline the antagonist or at least the danger that the mother is in to create more drama in your log line. I personally am ok with 'This is a story...'. In fact I had to hand in a logline and synopsis to a filming body and their example of a logline started with those words. But it just adds more words and the best loglines are under 25 words. ;-)

The ghost of a 5yr old girl will go to any lengths to protect her grieving mother from 'an unjust cause' so she can finally find happiness.

Hope this helps!

>>until her mother gets justice

Why does the mother need justice? What kind of justice? Does it have something to do with the kid's untimely death?