The Outside World (Redux)

by matthewmilam 0 pts 898 views

An introverted computer programmer takes a road trip with a recently divorced inspirational speaker with trying to kill himself.

2 reviews

matthewmilam 0 pts

I wish I could edit my log lines, but I'll just do it again with a correction (and expanding the plot a bit)

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

I like it MUCH better than the earlier version. The road trip is more cinematic.

But there's something wrong with your sentence syntax...

I assume the programmer must stop the speaker from killing himself (before they arrive at their destination)?