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why forced to kill amongst other, more practical solutions?
could reveal catalyst in a great catharsis, boiling disgust in the mind of an audience-making him root the protagonist-just enough to kill...
...still risky
cool logline though,
good luck with your short story!
>>>The logline has but a single purpose: to convey the most essential elements of your story concisely, imaginatively, and smoothly.
That is the means to a logline's singular objective goal (yes, a logline, like a protagonist, should have an objective goal): sell the script, to make someone want to read the script.
The ?"Formula" resource on the web site summarizes what the "essential elements" are.
All formulas, all rules have exceptions and variations, but the general formula works for most plots, most of the time.
>>>conflict in it, which would be the stakes
The stakes are what is to be gained or lost as a result of the conflict. ?Like a boxing match. ?Whoever wins the fight, wins the prize, the acclaim.
The stakes in this story are clear enough to me: ?she's struggling for her freedom, freedom from the pain and humiliation of a chronically abusive husband. ?More than that, she's fighting for her life, as she may justifiably fear he'll eventually kill her.
Your right, the short story I did write has conflict in it, which would be the stakes.? I think I was thinking more alone the lines of 'Big' stakes, like found in action movie.? And yes a logline's soul purpose is to get someone to read/buy/make your script.
"The logline has but a single purpose: to convey the most essential elements of your story concisely, imaginatively, and smoothly. " by ? taken from his article on Building the perfect logline
WHO the story is about, what they want (their GOAL), and what stands in their way (the OBSTACLE)
So in mine, the WHO is the Abused wife,? the OBSTACLE is the Husband, thier GOAL is to escape for good.
Now maybe the wording of "death trap" is off, but If I say too much, it could ruin it.? On the other hand, if I don't have enough, no one will read.
What I think I have works but I'm not sure.? And yes, every bit helps, Thank you.