Spending months planning his wife's murder to make it look like suicide. A man comes home to find his wife has killed herself. He now has to prove he didn't do it.
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We'll have to agree to disagree on what a logline is.
Just like most plans they leave you exposed until they are executed. He has things in place that point to him, but would have been okay at a later date.
"Why would someone go on the run after find their spouse had committed suicide?" -
Good question, if he planned her murder prior to her suicide or not why would he be a suspect? The same plot hole exists whether or not he planned her murder as no one would know he was secretly planning to kill her. I was just trying to improve the logline using as much of your original concept.
"As with many logline it stay virtually in the first act and hints and the path and resolution." - WRONG.
A logline describes a plot and a plot takes place over multiple acts.
An ideal log line:
Describes a MC and the inciting incident and goal - all in act 1
The Antagonist, obstacles and what the MC will do to achieve said goal - act 2
Hints at the resolution of both external and inner journey - act 3
A logline can be used to help structure a plot or sell a story depends on the writer and stage of development of the story.
If you are using it as a structure tool then you need to know what the plot is across all acts.
If you are pitching then a strong act 2 (the bulk of the film) will normally make the sale. This is because act one will hook the listeners interests but you need them to want to know more this will happen if there is a promise for a strong "more" i.e act 2. Then they will ask you to describe the concept in further detail.
Hi Nir,
Why would someone go on the run after find their spouse had committed suicide? I see what you are saying, but dropping the setup I think leaves more questions and removes what makes the story compelling. There is no need to prove his innocents unless facts point to him, like a half completed murder plot.
Her death would be the twist that I would spin into the second act. As with many logline it stay virtually in the first act and hints and the path and resolution.