Slated for Banishment on her sixteenth birthday, a young warrior must elude capture, rescue her best friend and hope her own twist doesn?t mutate further in the process. If they do manage to escape, Keira will have to face her nightmares, the creatures of a world twisted by the DNA Wars, and survive long enough to reach the City of Lights where she will be free from persecution.

Her own twist? Leave world-building for the actual screenplay and try focusing just on the core story and protagonist and you will find your word count will drop dramatically. Hope this helps.

Her own twist? Leave world-building for the actual screenplay and try focusing just on the core story and protagonist and you will find your word count will drop dramatically. Hope this helps.

Agreed with DPG this is too long and complex.

After reviewing the Training tab, trie and isolate the MC's inciting incident and goal. Once you have the inciting incident and goal structure a new logline, and focus only on these elements - no back story, and no subplots.