Leannf411

Penpusher · 136 points

164 points to Logliner

on When the Devil steals the Grim Reaper’s power source, her scythe, releasing the undead on the earth, Death must reunite with her estranged brothers, regain her powers and stop the Apocalypse.

I am assuming that Death and the Grim Reaper are the same person? It feels a little unclear. I agree that the devil is a little too (easy? ). Try picking a specific one .......Maybe Lucifer or one of the…
on Izzy Concannon: Rogue, outlaw, lost Terran, finds herself on a doomed vessel hunting the last of the mad battleships in deep space.

I agree with the above but also I think the "mad battleships" needs more ........ are the ships aware? Are the people manning them crazy? Can you think of a creative way to define the quest and make it more…
on After a sorcerer kills her father, a sheltered princes must search for her exiled enchantress mother in order to learn the forbidden arts and save her people from the usurper

I think you can end with ? ?"......and take back the Throne." ? Obviously they are a rival since they have stolen the throne. ?I like the idea. Can you add her name? Princess........ ? ? ?I would like to…
on After a botched robbery, two incompetent thieves must avoid the authorities and elude a serial killer who they carjacked.

I love it. Would just change the last part - they can't elude the serial killer if they are all in the same car - maybe just reword this bit.