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Nir, that is a very good goal. I am totally searching for comedic situations (knowing very well that drama is needed for comedy) and her forming her own band seems ripe for comedy.? Thanks.
And dpg - thanks for more insight and provoking thought to expand and also be specific in this character's goal.
I see potential in this if the groupie has more of a definative goal. What if her goal is to start her own band and beat the band that kicked her out at their own game?
For example:
After being shunned by the band she followed, a lonely groupie starts her own band in order to beat the other one to top of the charts on iTunes.
Jackalboy11:
Then I suggest leading off with something like
"After being dropped as a groupie from the only band that would have her, a lonely [or some other vulnerability] middle aged woman [does something defined in terms of an objective goal]."
I'm not saying to drop the shrink from the plot if that's the way you want to go. ? I'm merely suggesting he doesn't need to be mentioned in the the logline.
What the logline does need to accomplish is send the groupie-reject off in pursuit of a specific goal to fulfill her obvious subjective need (for acceptance, love and all that). ?Maybe she's destined to go through a series of Mr. Right's until she meets-cute Mr. Right and and hilarity ensues. ?Whatever, leave that for the script.
As I said, I think you have a rough gem of a character for a story. ?But she needs polishing and setting within the context of an interesting plot. ?Best wishes with the story.