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Hi! Seems like you have a good start to a logline! However, it seems to have a lot going on here. What do you think about simplifying it to "one character" with a clear "major event" that establishes a clear "actionable goal" for the character?
Example: "An ex-soldier is caught in a cat and mouse game between the mob and the police when he is framed for a crime he didn't commit. He must prove his innocence before the mob kills his family."