On the verge of being alone for the rest of his life, a lazy man falls in love with a miniature woman who lives in the small model city that he finds in the spare bedroom of his new apartment, but when he can't figure out a way to shrink himself to her size he must push himself to his limits to find a way in, before he loses the girl of his dreams.

Miniature

4 reviews

mrmitchboyer 0 pts

Thanks everyone for the comments! Glad you find it interesting! I agree, Richiev, I need to find a deadline. throwitfar - I like the logline you suggested, it helped a lot. I've got some more work to do to tighten it up, and your suggestions help a lot.

Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai · 1,742 pts

Amazing concept. Would definitely watch.

I also agree with Richiev on his points, so don't need to repeat.

throwitfar 0 pts

I agree about the start by Richiev: "" That just POPS.

I had a lot written, but here's the key thoughts from me, try this:

"A lonely man falls in love with a miniature woman he discovers living in a model city in his spare room- unable to shrink himself and running out of time- he finds himself searching desperately for a way into the city, and her heart.

This would be a fun read! Hope I helped, even a little!

Best of luck!