Many believe the most dreaded words in a hospital are ‘Code Blue, they are wrong. Although serious, they are not even close to those that strike fear in the most hardened hospital administrator: “We are about to exceed ‘Surge Capacity'”.

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Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

Who is the lead character?

What is their goal?

What is standing in their way?

Mike Pedley Singularity · 51,300 pts

As mrliteral said.

As an additional note, I had no idea that 'Code Blue' are the most dreaded words in a hospital. Why should I know that?

Surely this is still a situation that does actually occur and, albeit rare, is still planned for and has a protocol to be followed. Without having the elements mrliteral mentioned, it's very difficult to know what the story actually is here and, more importantly, why is this a story worth telling.

mrliteral Mentor · 2,660 pts

This is not a logline. Protagonist, antagonist, conflict, stakes, in a single sentence 20-30 words. No vague notions. Be specific about who the characters are and what they want/need to do.