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When a clinical study to create a vaccination that lowers heart attack risks accidentally creates a novel deadly flu variant, a medical missionary is forced to team up with the virus’s creators to stop a potential global pandemic that could kill millions. The missionary nun and her spy companions are forced to rely on a brutal Russian biocontainment unit if they are to escape from the Caribbean island’s deranged dictator and find a cure to prevent a global disaster.

May 5, 2023
A medical missionary uncovers a deadly virus developed by a covert military unit on a Caribbean island, racing against time to prevent a global pandemic.

March 6, 2023
Many believe the most dreaded words in a hospital are ‘Code Blue, they are wrong. Although serious, they are not even close to those that strike fear in the most hardened hospital administrator: “We are about to exceed ‘Surge Capacity'”.

March 18, 2020
Death is ignoble. Poets may claim otherwise, but there is nothing heroic about its finality. Ed zippered the body bag over the now perpetually young soldier; that once virile face would haunt him for years. ………..would like feedback on this opening sentence

August 14, 2017
Lt. Colonel Tony Stryker, a military ?Bug Collector? fights to contain his own creation after its accidental release traps him in the hot zone of a third world island.

June 21, 2017
An Obeah Woman leads a bioweapons collector into the Ta?no ?Land of Souls? to find the cure for a deadly virus he helped create

March 26, 2017
A military bioweapons collector attempts to cover-up an accidental release of a deadly, new strain of flu by destroying the project’s hard drive before his Russian counterpart can prove the CIA’s involvement.

March 24, 2017
A military bioweapons collector engages in a game of ?cat and mouse? with his Russian counterpart who is also his former lover . The mysterious, subterranean world of the Taino Indians hides the only cure for the outbreak of an emerging virus. He has only hours amid growing civil unrest to find the cure before the virus destroys the tropical ?paradise? and releases a global pandemic.

March 23, 2017
Things get hot in a Dead Zone for a ?Bad Bug Collector? after an accidental viral release on a tropical island.

March 22, 2017

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on A medical missionary uncovers a deadly virus developed by a covert military unit on a Caribbean island, racing against time to prevent a global pandemic.

actually it may work but ill leave out the word covert as it is basically what we did when we sponsored Gain of Function research in China. The US sponsors others to do research that may be deemed illegal under…
on A medical missionary uncovers a deadly virus developed by a covert military unit on a Caribbean island, racing against time to prevent a global pandemic.

but she isn't famous nor was the release meant to be evil, it was accidental just like Covid probably was in china, and in my story, the militia is actually our own military doing gain-of-function research disguised in a dual-use…
on Death is ignoble. Poets may claim otherwise, but there is nothing heroic about its finality. Ed zippered the body bag over the now perpetually young soldier; that once virile face would haunt him for years. ………..would like feedback on this opening sentence

BINGO! thanks a lot, This episode is pivotal years later. Ed suffers from PTSD doing this stuff for decades. He partitions it away in his mind but eventually something triggers him to snap. Ed becomes a sociopath with PTSD and…
on Death is ignoble. Poets may claim otherwise, but there is nothing heroic about its finality. Ed zippered the body bag over the now perpetually young soldier; that once virile face would haunt him for years. ………..would like feedback on this opening sentence

it is the opening line of a prologue for a novel. I wanted to see if it adds more emotion. Here is the first graph: Death is ignoble. Poets may claim otherwise, but there is nothing heroic about its finality.…
on Lost in deep space, the crew of a rescue ship must cooperate with an alien rebels to find a way home.

works for me
on Lt. Colonel Tony Stryker, a military ?Bug Collector? fights to contain his own creation after its accidental release traps him in the hot zone of a third world island.

the virus is used during a dual use clinical study that has both legitimate medical uses as a vaccine but also military ones as a 'smart' biological weapon capable of targeting and killing at the individual level. The problem is,…
on Lt. Colonel Tony Stryker, a military ?Bug Collector? fights to contain his own creation after its accidental release traps him in the hot zone of a third world island.

An ancient, resurrected virus escapes during testing on an isolated island. A bioweapons specialist has only 24 hours to contain it to prevent a pandemic.
on Lt. Colonel Tony Stryker, a military ?Bug Collector? fights to contain his own creation after its accidental release traps him in the hot zone of a third world island.

A military ?Bug Collector? fights to contain an ancient virus after its accidental release traps him in quarantine on a third world island.
on Lt. Colonel Tony Stryker, a military ?Bug Collector? fights to contain his own creation after its accidental release traps him in the hot zone of a third world island.

yes, it is a modern day version of frankenstein actually. He resurrects a 25 million year old virus then it escapes and starts killing people
on Lost in deep space, the crew of a rescue ship must cooperate with an alien rebels to find a way home.

I've offered you an edit before but here is another, thanks for reading mine. The crew of a deep space rescue ship have one choice, reveal their home planet's location to alien marauders or remain lost in space forever.
on Lt. Colonel Tony Stryker, a military ?Bug Collector? fights to contain his own creation after its accidental release traps him in the hot zone of a third world island.

Actually he is a biological collector and not a scientist at all. In the world of science real life collectors do exist for biological agents. You would not send a geek doctor into a hot zone where people are rioting…
on An Obeah Woman leads a bioweapons collector into the Ta?no ?Land of Souls? to find the cure for a deadly virus he helped create

Funny I originally used 'must make' because it added urgency but then changed it. So I guess I finally nailed that logline: A?Bioweapons Collector must make the hazardous journey through?sacred caverns of the ?Land of the Souls?to prevent ?a pandemic…
on An Obeah Woman leads a bioweapons collector into the Ta?no ?Land of Souls? to find the cure for a deadly virus he helped create

I ?am starting to believe the serial nature of my novel could be easily adapted for TV like the show 'Lost' or 'The Walking Dead' I may have to consider having a separate query for a film agent
on An Obeah Woman leads a bioweapons collector into the Ta?no ?Land of Souls? to find the cure for a deadly virus he helped create

I read this and it is correct. I worked with DNA for nearly 20 years and all life is created by 4 simple compounds that are represented by A, C, T, G ?in DNA. ?My story has to do the…
on An Obeah Woman leads a bioweapons collector into the Ta?no ?Land of Souls? to find the cure for a deadly virus he helped create

wow i am shocked Obeah woman isnt well known after Pirates of the Caribbean, ?Obeah are sort of like shamans ?but much older and some of it is similar to voodoo but it is still distinct, I cant't even say…
on A cash strapped hit-woman, must confront the demons of her past, while juggling the bone crunching world of professional hits and the guardianship of her deceased sisters kids.

Hmm this sounds vaguely like Die Hard with a Diaper or Misadventures in Babysitting . I did lear something on Stack Exchange though about cliches: Writers often indulge a charming fantasy that publisher and agents are looking for originality. They…
on action,comedy about incurious uber driver forced to save the life of his next pick up who is young argumentative woman being chased by a group of terrorists.

Fee or flee? ?An Uber driver's ride argues over his rates as?terrorists chase them through one misadventure after another.
on Lost in deep space, the crew of a rescue ship must cooperate with an alien rebels to find a way home.

Hmmm, cooperate seems a bit weak perhaps Lost in deep space, the crew of a rescue ship must chose sides in an alien rebellion against another species if they wish to return ?home
on A military bioweapons collector attempts to cover-up an accidental release of a deadly, new strain of flu by destroying the project’s hard drive before his Russian counterpart can prove the CIA’s involvement.

Valid points all. The only way around making my hook work is to change the main character to another who is also dominant but more empathetic.?Here is ?what I have managed with this sudden veering: An Obeah Woman leads a…
on A military bioweapons collector attempts to cover-up an accidental release of a deadly, new strain of flu by destroying the project’s hard drive before his Russian counterpart can prove the CIA’s involvement.

first the easy question. The amoral female is Tatiana, the Collectors girlfriend who is also the sister of my character's Russian counterpart, They are actually friends and met in a bar in Istanbul, my Collector liked the Russian who introduced…