Jacob has lost faith. When a woman who says she's from the future appears at his door with a grave warning, Jacob must decide whether to believe her or face the consequences.

This is the logline to an untitled feature screenplay I have just started developing.

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Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai · 1,742 pts

thanks - that logline you've suggested is getting pretty close. i'd watch that movie!
i'll take another stab at it.

Andrew Bates Penpusher · 270 pts

hey nicholasandrewhalls
Irony catches the readers attention. Not all loglines have irony, but most of the good ones do, for example .

A lawyer that can not lie (liar liar) a king that can't speak to his people (The kings speach) That is irony.

"a future where criminals are arrested before the crime occurs, a drug addicted cop struggles on the lam to prove his innocence for a murder he has not yet committed. (Minority Report) Irony.

Jacobs own work turns out to be his down fall? Irony?

Your logline should be in between 25-30 words.

Names and age are irrelevant unless they are relevant to the story.
The protag is a developer. How would you describe him, character-wise? Lonely? obsessive-compulsive? Drug addict? (like Minority Report) Something that he needs to overcome at the end of the story.

"After being warned from a woman claiming to be from the future. A obsessive developer must make the choice to heed her warning or continue his work that may bring the downfall of man"

something like that but better... Hope it helps.