Is this a valid log line? Or is it too vague?
A transplant recipient takes on the characteristics of his doner. From beyond the grave this is his only opportunity to untainted his family name.
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Upon 2nd reading, I see that I misconceived the project.
My SOP is to read a logline? fast and furious.? For which I don't apologize.? Because that's the way movie makers will read it.? There's a 5-10 second window of opportunity to get their attention and for them to get the story line.? If they aren't interested, if they don't understand? they just move on.
I see now that the protagonist of the story is not the recipient but rather the deceased organ donor.? ? I suggest the logline needs to be tweaked to make it clearer.?
But my other questions still pertain.? Why must he clear a tainted past?? Since he's "dead", what does he stand to lose -- what more can he lose -- if he doesn't
>>>He must untainted his name because he didn?t commit the crimes committed.
Okay.? And that should be clear in the logline.? The stakes are personal:? it's more than just the family name; his objective goal is exoneration, to prove his innocence.
Great inciting incident
But I'm unsure about the rest.? ?How will being transmorgified help him "untaint" his past.? What is the taint?? And why MUST he clear his family name NOW?? ?What's at stake?? What's does he stand to lose, what's the worst thing that can happen if he doesn't clear the taint?