In late nineteenth century America a Ghanaian former slave seeks revenge for the murder of his wife and child; he must team up with his former owner, a retired bounty hunter trying to renounce his violent past.

Revenge for what?

Agreed with Craig.

Does the bulk of the story take place in the old west or in modern day? And is the main character the Ghanaian man or his descendant?

This is a nice pitch but not a story.

I wouldn?t know what I was going to be involved in. A full western with a flash forward or that mimics a modern shooting. Or a modern shooting story with flashbacks to exactly the same events in the old west.

You can do this in a pitch when there is a chance for a conversation. But a logline is a single shot.