In a world where men carry at least one trimester of pregnancy, an anxious mother takes drastic steps including breaking laws to ensure that when it’s her accident-prone husband’s turn, the baby survives the experience.

Title: Shared Pregnancy

 

5 reviews

InksE Penpusher · 20 pts

Hello Odie,
Sorry for the late reply. Thank you for your further comments on this logline. I really love your suggestion and I'll get to work on it. I must say that I'm happy to hear your wife got a laugh out of this. It is encouraging on account this is a comedy.:-) Thanks again for your comments and very useful tips. Cheers.

Odie Samurai · 2,208 pts

Ah, cool, then I believe you’re looking for something like this:
“In a world where men carry the final trimester of the pregnancy, an anxious mother must…”
Ask yourself, is my story what must she do to ensure her accident-prone husband delivers the baby? To help, write down all the funny scenarios where she has to intervene and compile them into one word or a small phrase.
Your getting closer, remember this is a visual medium, don’t add stuff like “she must do whatever it takes or perform miracles” as the reader cannot envision. Take your time on this, it’s got to make sense and be fun to make this a knockout.
BTW: This got a laugh out of my wife, good stuff.

InksE Penpusher · 20 pts

Thank you Odie, for your comments. It’s not a role reversal but the couple actually physically share the pregnancy. At some point, he must carry the child. Hence why he is terrified and being accident prone, she must ensure that when it’s his turn, the baby survives the experience.