In a partially built, luxury high rise building, a team of disgruntled construction workers, furious at just being fired, must band together to save their boss' daughter from a group of ruthless kidnappers who have stormed the building.

After "the transporter", "the mechanic", Staham will star in "The welder". Coming soon in a Nakatomi building near you.

Thanks for all your comments, the genesis of the idea came from wanting to make an action film where the heroes weren't action heroes but 'regular guys' who have some knowledge and skill in a particular environment, i.e. constriction and the layout of the building. Their motivation was meant to be selfless heroism as they can't leave an innocent party at risk. A lot of you have thrown in some interesting possibilities which I'll start exploring. Thanks for all you time and thoughts !!

>>but how does that get them any recompense in the form of cash?

Revenge can be its own reward, sufficient compensation. "Anybody ever ask you what the sweetest thing in life is... its revenge" -- Paul Lazzaro in "Slaughter-House 5" :-)

"Sure ? but how does that get them any recompense in the form of cash?"

...der... "we demolish your building unless you give us 10 mill"...

:)

"...the easiest thing for them to do ?the act of revenge where they actually had the skill set ? would be to conspire to demolish the building."

Sure -- but how does that get them any recompense in the form of cash?

My play was to try and focus on ONE individual with the heart of gold, as for a whole group to have this heart of gold as their M.O. didn't seem to fit given they were disgruntled for getting fired... fwiw 'n all dat.

Just some thoughts:

The lead character; a construction foreman and former Marine, has a growing friendship with the daughter. The Boss is a jerk and he refuses to deal with him, only the daughter.

The script opens with the lead saving the day, (Some crisis) but blamed for the crises by the jerk boss and fired.

But as he is gathering his stuff, (In a deserted part of the construction) the building is stormed and the daughter, (Romantic interest) is captured.

Now the lead is determined to rescue the daughter in spite his dislike of the father who just fired him.

So the lead character begins taking out the bad guys Die Hard style, using his knowledge of the partially constructed building.

The big reveal comes when the audience discovers the father was in on it from the beginning.

Hero saves the day, kisses the girl and bad guy dies horribly when he fall from the building onto the blades of a helicopter... Fade to black.

:)

And interesting idea... but if construction workers really wanted to take revenge for being fired, the easiest thing for them to do --the act of revenge where they actually had the skill set -- would be to conspire to demolish the building. Maybe after all the super-rich tenants have moved in.

The notion of the original logline is that DESPITE their animosity towards the boss, they would rescue his daughter. Why? What's their motivation? Well, because it's the decent, humane thing to do. And because they might have an expectation of getting their jobs back as a reward for their good deed.

But WHY are the kidnappers going after the boss's daughter? The inciting incident is triggered by the kidnappers, not the fired workers, and it is triggered in relation to the boss, not in relation to the workers. The workers just happen to be there. There initial involvement seems to be a matter of coincidence rather than causality.

The boss seems to have offended 2 parties. What does the plot say about him? Is he the kind of guy who is better at making enemies than winning friends?

It seems to me the logline needs refocusing.

An apprentice builder takes on his vengeful co-workers when they kidnap their boss's daughter inside an unfinished high rise, as revenge for getting sacked.

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Why would they want to save the daughter of the boss who's just fired them? I can't see a plausible motive for the action.

I agree with dpg. Instead of kidnappers, maybe a group who funded the build such as a drug cartel, giving them motive for kidnap. Either the boss pays up or his daughter gets it.
What is the relivence of the high rise? Does everything take place there? How come they don't leave? Why would the construction workers get involved? In die hard the it appeared as though they were taking hostages, but the real reason that they remained in the building was thst they needed time to rob
It. Do you villains have an alterior motive?

What's the point? Why have a "group of ruthless kidnappers....stormed the building"? Are they, too, disgruntled construction workers fired by the same boss? :-)

I think we need a hero in there somewhere, as even ensamble movies such as ocean's 11 have a hero.

When an armed gang strike an unfinished luxery high rise and kidnap his employers daughter, a foreman must persuade the union workers he just fired to risk their lives, and cross the picket line.

Just an example.
I had a bit of a play around. As they are all sacked, maybe they could be unionised and are fairly disgruntled. When the bad guys strike, the good guys cross the picket line (the picket line could actually be there, one that they made, or it could be a metaphor for something else - an imaginary line, on one side is the exit and to safety, on the other we assend towards danger and the bad guys. When they are at this low point, they could remain beaten men, leave with nothing. Or ascend, go up, face the dangers and become more then men).