In a future with anti-gravity tech, a gang of street-wise orphans help a celebrity "sky-runner" athlete accused of terrorism survive the planet’s deadly slums and destroy the cyborg general who framed him.

patrockable, I hear ya. However, I posted that earlier one to a popular scriptwriting blog and it was dragged over the coals until it was pulp -- people really did not like it / felt it had too much jargon specific to the world in it. As a lover of sci-fi, I'm used to figuring out sci-fi jargon by its context, so it doesn't bother me. But I can see where it was a big turn-off for readers not attuned to doing that.

Thanks! Very helpful!

I like it, it has a 5th Element vibe to it! But I like your first one better:

"When a young, arrogant celebrity athlete is framed for blowing up the floating Imperial sky-palace, he escapes with a rag-tag bunch of surfacer teens into the planet's crime-ridden slums to bring to justice the Empire's most notorious terrorist ? its ruler."

In your first logline it is clear that the main character is the athlete, and an inner journey is promised: from arrogant to humble.

In the new one, who is the main character? It could be the athlete or one of the orphans. And no inner journey is promised. I suggest re-writing it so the main character is clear, and give him a weakness, so we are promised an inner journey.