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on I Was A Mutant Beauty Queen: A disgraced beauty queen must embrace her inner "ugly" to defeat the mutant horde trapped in the bio-gen building with her and her co-workers.

Kind of like Resident Evil meets Legally Blonde.
on Jacob has lost faith. When a woman who says she's from the future appears at his door with a grave warning, Jacob must decide whether to believe her or face the consequences.

>Jacob must decide whether to believe her or face the consequences. The first part of the logline is specific enough, but this is too vague, IMHO, and doesn't tell us what the stakes are or who the antagonist is.
on In a future with anti-gravity tech, a gang of street-wise orphans help a celebrity "sky-runner" athlete accused of terrorism survive the planet’s deadly slums and destroy the cyborg general who framed him.

patrockable, I hear ya. However, I posted that earlier one to a popular scriptwriting blog and it was dragged over the coals until it was pulp -- people really did not like it / felt it had too much jargon…
on To stop her ex-husband from stealing the Mona Lisa, a world-class cat burglar turned security expert must illegally install her own security in the Louvre.

Hi! Good news is that your logline definitely made me think that most of the movie was about her attempting to install the security equipment. So, it's clear. However, I have to agree with patrockable... not really a movie, IMHO.