In 2050 L.A., a detective accused of murder must clear her name by catching the real suspect: a famous actress cloned from her DNA. MINORITY REPORT meets ORPHAN BLACK.

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dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

What's the hook of your story? Hollyweird glitter? ?Or cloning? ?I opt for the latter. ??

I think your concept is strong enough to not need some pixie dust, some Hollyweird glitter. ?But if you insist, make the detective the prime suspect in the murder of a Hollyweird celebrity. ?Now you've got your glitter. And after all, shouldn't she be accused of killing someone significant? ?(And you can still keep the actress clone as a suspect because she has a motive: eliminating a competitor, or she's a jealous jilted lover. Whatever Hollyweird folks feud about.)

I see you posted an almost identical logline for this story in March. ?I presume you've made a lot of headway with script since then. ?Best wishes for your writing.

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

I confused. ?Please clarify. ?Do you mean to say that she initially goes after the wrong clone? ??IOW: the actress is a dramatic decoy, a false lead. ?That's what the entire 2nd Act is about, following a dramatic dead end? ?

Because the action described in a logline triggered by the inciting accident is always understood to be what the entire 2nd Act is about.