Forced to stay at home following a heart attack, a high powered exec realizes he doesn’t know his teenage daughter when she announces she?s pregnant, prompting him to try and reconnect with her and stabilize the family.

Simon Someone

9 reviews

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

wilsondownunder:

The reason I suggested combining the two is because they are major turning points in the both their lives, come unexpectedly and at the most inconvenient time, create maximum complications and force each to deal with their character flaws (whatever they are) and their flawed (nill?) relationship.

IOW: the ingredients for a good story.

So I think the combo crisis is a good premise. However, I think the logline needs a little work. Need more time to think about.

wilsondownunder Penpusher · 1 pts

How about:

"Whilst on a forced vacation, a high powered exec realizes he doesn't know his teenage daughter when she announces she's pregnant, and sets about trying to reconnect with her before returning to work."

wilsondownunder Penpusher · 1 pts

I'll take you advice on maybe not including both elements in the logline though