During the Holocaust, a 10 year old german girl must convince everyone she know's that the Romani gypsy girl she is hidding is just an imaginary friend.

I think this could be a great story. And your logline isn't bad either.Although the pros here could probably make it better. Best, Rutger

This story has so much potential. While I agree with one comment that the German girl's parents should be Nazi supporters or push it even further, have her father be SS. Always remember to throw every obstacle at your characters, make life very hard for them. However, I find the other comments really confusing, especially the one suggesting you move location, period and scenario... That's not your story. It would be wise for commenters to remember that you aren't trying to get the log liners to change their idea completely or tell them to definitely do x or definitely do y, the goal is to make the idea they have stronger.

You have a great idea here and I think you should explore it whilst remembering to make the conflict incredibly high and make it increasingly difficult for the GG to keep her friend a secret.

I like your take on the story Elizabeth. My rough plan had a rather weak begining, but the Hungarian incidents would be a fantastic element, which i'd like to thank you for. I will still persist with the Holocaust element, but i'm heading towards pre-WW2, which allows a little bit more freedom of movement, and also allows those who are unaware that the persacution began a lot sooner then Holywood would have you believe.
I have also played around with having the location in another region, as well as the setting being in a hotel.
Regarding the numbers helping her, i have 1 man doing just this, but he is not doing it for the right reasons.
As it stands, this project will remain in the planning stages for several more months whilst i finish my first project.

Even if I accept that such a thing is possible, you need a lot of people involved to help the German girl to hide the Roma girl. It just depends what year your story takes place and where. City or country. I personally think it would be much more interesting to write a current story about the plight of Roma in Eastern Europe. For example, they are already being killed in Hungary. What if it was a Hungarian girl going to bat for a Roma girl today? You could have her grandparents being Holocaust survivors, who see history repeating itself. It could be a much richer story than an old WWII story few people identify with today ? even if it's with a Roma twist. You can tell the WWII suffering of the Roma in such a modern setting and it would be a revelation to modern audiences. I agree that their story must be told.

"After she discovers a gypsy girl hiding in her family's boathouse, a German girl risks the wrath of the Nazi's by harboring the refugee, all while pretending to her patriotic family, she's playing with an imaginary friend."

Thanks for your queeries.
Answering your questions, it is a work of fiction.
For all my stories i start with a 3 page plan. You are right in your out growing her imaginary friend. In the short story i had the version of avents occuring over a short period, maybe two years at the most. I had an idea of her receving psycilogical treatment to rid her of this friend. The end of her story also had a happy ending of either being accepted by the rich family, or taken in by the police officer.

As i am writting it through a childs perspective, confusion could allow for the audience to believe that she has no one to turn to. At one stage i had a grounds keeper assist her, which led to the entire story arcing in a different direction. Without giving to much away, he is the killer who the police officer will try to track down. Becausing of this cross over of stories, i feel it would be to much to fit into a 110 ish page script.
story one is the rich girls story. The villain is present, but we won't know he is a killer. He will appear to just be helpful. The police officer is only briefly seen in one or two scenes.
story 2 is the police officers story, both of the other two charectors will briefly appear, the villain more so.
story 3 is the villains tale, which ties all 3 stories together.

Of course, not all Germans supported Hitler or the persecution and execution of state-designated undesirables. All, I'm saying is that it would make for a more interesting drama if she can't look for sympathy and moral courage within her family. She will have to use her wits and find support elsewhere. (Perhaps from her peer group?)

And given how many years she must hide the gypsy girl, isn't she doomed to age-out of her "imaginary friend" cover story? Her family might indulge her when she's 10, but when she's 12...14...16?

Is this entirely a work of fiction or is it based upon or "inspired by" real historical events, a real young German girl who saved a Roman girl during the Nazi era?

I can see where you're going, but through the childs interpretation, the parents good intents will maybe be misunderstood.
There is an evil force in this story, which draws the police officer in to the story. In short, the police officer disgraces himself and his family by also being sympathetic to a group of Jews. To avoid embaresement he is sent away to a quite part of the country, but all is not as it seems. The town has a murderer living in their mists, and his investigation will not be wanted.

I want to create a story which is not following the stereotype of that era. Not all germans wanted involvement in the mass murders. Not all police were gestapo and also, draw attention to the forgotten millions such as the gypsys, homosexuals elderly and infirm who were sent to their deaths.

>>she is unaware that her family are sympathetic to the plight of millions

Why not up the ante and risk by having her family unsympathetic? Dare to take your premise to the red line -- and beyond.

Good question.
my idea is that the girl is a wealthy girl, her family own a lot of land. She hides the gypsy girl in a kind of boat house. She feeds her, plays with her etc. She is kind of aware that things are not right with the world, and the gypsy girl begs her to tell no one (i need to research if there would be a language barrier). Fearing she is about to be exposed, she concocts a story that as she has an invisible friend. Her sibling drowned many years ago, and it is thought that maybe she created this play friend following those tragic curcamstances (i may have the imaginary friend already exhisting, and the gypsy girl slots into that role nicely).
she is unaware that her family are sympathetic to the plight of millions, maybe the gypsy girl persaudes her not to trust any adults. This will be re-enforced when a family friend arrives, a police officer. Having seen how the gastapo treat their prisoners, the rich girl does not trust men in uniform.

Why does she have to concoct a fantastic story? If the girl is being hid, then what the neighbors don't know, they don't know that they don't know.

A dificulty i have been having with this is that it is only part of a 3 way story. It is the journey of the two girls. My other two main chatectors each have their own stories, so i may end up writting this as a novel first, consisting of 3 shortish stories. What i have in mind would be to long firstly for the logline and secondly to long for a singular script. It would probably be better suited to a 2 parter.

Any thoughts?