6 reviews
So family...
Best to avoid repetition and use details that build on one another in a concept.
Perhaps she struggles to connect with a particular family member instead of the whole family? Describe who died instead of a generic family member. Who specifically does she need to catch up with? Brother, sister, twin, etc...
The good news is, I have known a couple of somewhat dysfunctional families where funerals are basically family reunions. It is the only time they can seem to put aside their differences and get along for a couple of days.
As a result, I think some people could relate to the situation.
The bad news is, it seems to be missing that 'one extra thing' because catching up with family is a very normal activity if you haven't seen them in a while.
This is a good set-up but I think it needs a hook in order to grab the reader.
Sounds too much like?Death at a Funeral ?(2007). ?Make sure it's not.