REVISED: When her beloved grandma passes away, an estranged young woman must find a way of fulfilling her grandma?s last wish while struggling to reconnect with her dysfunctional family at the funeral.

6 reviews

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

So family...

Best to avoid repetition and use details that build on one another in a concept.

Perhaps she struggles to connect with a particular family member instead of the whole family? Describe who died instead of a generic family member. Who specifically does she need to catch up with? Brother, sister, twin, etc...

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

The good news is, I have known a couple of somewhat dysfunctional families where funerals are basically family reunions. It is the only time they can seem to put aside their differences and get along for a couple of days.
As a result, I think some people could relate to the situation.

The bad news is, it seems to be missing that 'one extra thing' because catching up with family is a very normal activity if you haven't seen them in a while.
This is a good set-up but I think it needs a hook in order to grab the reader.

Anette Logliner · 471 pts

Sounds too much like?Death at a Funeral ?(2007). ?Make sure it's not.