Bitten by a zombie then discarded by her protector, a timid woman struggling to survive learns there's more to the apocalypse and the man she trusted.

Jaredmacary:

It's pretty well chiseled in granite now that Zombie bites are immediately fatal. So that's what people expect to happen. But you can break the rule that once bitten by a zombie the results are immediate and irreversible. It's a matter of how.

If your story pivots on an exception to the rule, you have to either introduce a dramatic instance of the exception OR at least the possibility of an exception in the first Act.

And in the 2nd Act, you have to have at least 1 more strong beat reminding the audience of the exception, before you pay off the story with the exception.

So it can be done.

>>>>It is the twist at the end and the pay-off that challenges convention.

Then that is the hook that could make our script stand out, make it rise to the top of the reading pile of the 1,001 other scripts about zombies. So I suggest that you don't bury your twist. Rather, flaunt it.

Also "there's more to the apocalypse" is cryptic, vague-- doesn't convey any useful information that lures me to your story. A good logline is bait on a hook that lures the reader's mind to the script.

fwiw.

Jaybird. Great comment. I'm thinking more now how to make the logline more action-oriented and certainly want to avoid trite phrases. I'll keep working on it.

Jaybird. Great comment. I'm thinking more now how to make the logline more action-oriented and certainly want to avoid trite phrases. I'll keep working on it.