Being mocked for his frequent hemorrhoids, a frustrated teenager forms a group with elderly patients to protest and make people sympathetic towards them.

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Mike Pedley Singularity · 51,300 pts

Perhaps change it from elderly patients to elderly sufferers or even "the haemorrhoidic?elderly".

Since anyone at any age can get haemorrhoids (although it's more common in older age), couldn't it be a "forms a support group of fellow sufferers..."

If the aim of the protagonist is to raise awareness about haemorrhoids and make them more accepted in society then surely having a diverse group of sufferers will say a lot more than a group of the stereotypical elderly sufferers.

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

>>>Yeah thats why I stated elderly patients.
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You seem to have missed my point.? Not all elderly "patients" have hemorrhoids.? But your logline makes no distinction.

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

Some elderly people suffer from hemorrhoids.? Some don't.? But the logline makes no such distinction.? In that regard it seems to stereotype the elderly.