Astronaut’s Grave – Death row prisoners are given freedom by the state if they can come back alive from a space exploration.

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CraigDGriffiths Singularity · 20,463 pts

Perhaps a few whys? Answered

Why use death row inmates?
Why is it so dangerous?

Worry about the main character issue once you can article the conflict.

SouthWestSusie Samurai · 766 pts

Hello, Jlmarvevalo.
Thanks for sharing your logline. Is there a main character that the story focuses on? That would help to make the longline more specific and compelling. I'm assuming your character is one of these prisoners. Why will we care about this particular character's story? Is the person a murderer? Is the person innocent? Is the person afraid of flying? Would the person rather stay in prison? Does the person actually want to die in space? (Am just tossing out some ideas. You may already have the answer.)
Cheers, SouthWestSusie