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How about something like:
After failing another job interview, a proud man must put his ego aside and take any job he can to show his pregnant wife he can provide for his family before the birth of his child.
As variable said.
What is the inciting incident that created his realization?
As a result of that, what is his objective goal -- what does he decide to do it?
What/who stands in the way?
What are the stakes?
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Apart from a missing Goal (lack of establishing "what becomes his main action" in the story...) it works fine. So, something like --
???After losing all his investments at his 30th birthday, a man born with a silver spoon must do odd jobs to provide for his high maintenance family???
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