An insecure man whose soul communicates with other souls in the spiritual realm of dreams, will need to overcome his fears in order to find and bring back his sister?s soul whose body lies in a coma.

Hi NIr Shelter Thank you very much for your feedback!

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I like the ticking time clock. Nir; the lead has to save his sister before she's taken off life support.

Perhaps describe him as a medium which implies he can communicate with spirits instead of the long description in the current draft.

Also perhaps make the sister his twin it comes across as a higher stake.

Lastly ti isn't clear from the logline whether he will travel into the spirit world to find the sister or stay in the real world and just communicate with spirits. I think it would make for a more interesting story if he were to travel into the special world on a mission and undergo an adventure there al la' Tron or Alice in Wonderland.

If this is the case then perhaps mention in the logline that he must travel into the spirit realm etc?

e.g
After his twin sister lapses into a coma, an insecure medium must travel across the spirit realm to rescue her sole and bring her back before the hospital takes her off life support.

Hope this helps.