An ex-major-league pitcher and alluring Irish banker who is terminally ill must race against time to rekindle their once vibrant romance before she dies.
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I enjoy Live-before-dying movies, so this premise definitely is something I am interested in.
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1: You don't need to say 'race against time' since there is an automatic time clock in 'terminally ill'
2: I am not won over by the goal of 'rekindle their once vibrant romance' is there some other goal you can use?
3: Just like in number 1, you don't need to say, before she dies.
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Question:
A: Are they both in love and having one last fling before dying?
B: Are they not in love anymore but going to see if they could fall back in love?
C: Is one still in love with the other and trying to use the short time left to win the other back?
Just curious
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Good luck with this, sounds like a good premise!
Happy to oblige Carl :)
I'm a bit sad you changed it, because I really thought you were onto something there. In any case, this is a somewhat good idea also. I would tweak the language a bit, because I thought the pitcher and the banker was the same person for a minute. Maybe you could put a comma in between, but I would say:
"An ex-major-league pitcher and his old Irish flame must rekindle their once vibrant romance, before he loses her to a terminal illness forever."
She's about to die, so the fact she's a banker is pretty much irrelevant, but it could make for a bittersweet love story?