An aging hitman goes up against his boss over a single night in order to protect his family.

I like that the logline is short and snappy but I need a reason in it for me to care about reading the script..

Firstly, I can see this story having the depth and engaging tone of redemption that was in Clint Eastwood's "Gran Torino" (2008). In fact, potentially, this story could even be better than 'Torino' ... Depending on how well written the hitman character is and how well conflicted his loyalties become.

The logline nicely draws up the stakes (his family) and risks involved (his age, opposing his powerful former boss). High marks there.

I don't have any real criticisms against this logline. It is succinct and intriguing.

Steven Fernandez (Judge)

Idea seems solid but "over a single night" is too vague. How exactly does he defy his boss and why? And does he protect his family by going against an order or does he have to protect them because he has refused it?