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I like this concept, only you have to find a way to trim it up
Your story is certainly a good one. Some snips and cuts where the others have suggested would improve your logline.
I'm thinking you might just get away with saying, "drawn into a violent conflict with an ancient civilization" and not really need the part about "fellow prisoners." (given that our protagonist is a prisoner, you've already sort of lead on that it's prisoner vs ancient civilization)
I agree with timmyelliot about the "three hundred years in the future" phrase. It made me think of time travel as well.
I think this is a really good logline. The reader knows who the protagonist is, what the conflict is, and with whom.
I like it.
I don't think you need the phrase, "three hundred years in the future," because that level of specificity doesn't seem necessary to the story (when you were specific about the year, I thought for sure it was going to be a time travel story, which surprised me that it wasn't).
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