After the death of his secret lover, a closeted small-town lawyer struggles with his drug addiction until he finds fulfillment in his long-forgotten passion: dancing

by eliasbaar 28 pts

or Logline #2:

After the death of his secret lover, a closeted small-town lawyer struggles with his drug addiction and leaves his old life for a long-forgotten passion: dancing.

 

Can you imagine/picture it? Does it make sense to YOU?

Or does it (drug addiction, dancing) need to be explained further/differently?

And which one do you like better?

 

Thanks xx

5 reviews

Odie Samurai · 2,208 pts

I vote for More Cowbell aka Richiev ballroom dancing version.
He's got the addict fever... and the cure... is more dancing ;)

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

"After the murder of his secret lover, a drug-addicted lawyer seeks revenge on those who killed the man he loved."

"After the murder of his secret lover, a drug-addicted lawyer seeks solace in ballroom dancing, but must overcome his addictions if he's to truly be free."

eliasbaar 28 pts

His addiction problem. I worked out a slighty different logline.

What do you think about: "After the murder of his secret lover, a closeted small-town lawyer struggles with his addiction problem and leaves his old life to seek revenge."

...is it clearer know?

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

What is standing in the lead character's way?

Former member 20 pts

I like it! It makes sense to me and I picture it being a drama, maybe with some comedy. I would specify the drug(s) he's addicted to and what form of dancing your MC does. I prefer Logline #2 because "leaves his old life" paints a clearer picture than saying: "until he finds fulfillment". I would add what the main obstacle is for your MC, what has the potential to negatively affect his life? Is your MC still an addict after finding his true calling?