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• on A closeted writer struggling with addiction searches for the murderer of his secret lover as he delves deeper into his revenge fantasies.

  Thank you! I think that's a great revision!

• on A closeted writer struggling with addiction searches for the murderer of his secret lover as he delves deeper into his revenge fantasies.

  Thank you, Richiev :)

• on An adopted young woman must overcome trauma looks for her biological family and develops a career as a musician.

  Good for her... But what obstacles must she overcome? What is at stake?

• on After the death of his secret lover, a closeted small-town lawyer struggles with his drug addiction until he finds fulfillment in his long-forgotten passion: dancing

  His addiction problem. I worked out a slighty different logline. What do you think about: "After the murder of his secret lover, a closeted small-town lawyer struggles with his addiction problem and leaves his old life to seek revenge." ...is…

• on With no justice for the recent death of a gay dancer, a frustrated editor feels compelled to give his death meaning, while searching for his own.

  Thank you this helps a lot!! I just thought of something similar... maybe they could have been secret lovers. Take care.

• on With no justice for the recent death of a gay dancer, a frustrated editor feels compelled to give his death meaning, while searching for his own.

  Thank you for your answer, Philippe, I'll think about it! Btw: if you're THE artist, I just checked your artworks and I'm a fan of it! Honored that you responded to my logline :-) Take care!

• on When a naive and shy young man loses his humanity to an evil futuristic corporation, he tries to destroy it to free himself and others with the questionable help of two sides, good and evil, from which he finds no difference.

  I like the idea of the two sides good and evil, from which he finds no difference!!

• on In a male-dominated town, a frustrated editor attends to self-help groups for men, not to seek help but to prepare himself against them.

  Thank you! He doesn't know the gay dancer personally but he finds a sublime beauty in him and a resemblance to himself, so he takes it personally... Do you have an idea how to put that into the logline? :D

• on In a male-dominated town, a frustrated editor secretly attends self-help groups for men to prepare himself against them after the death of a gay dancer.

  Thank you very much! This is very helpful. I was thinking the same thing about the "after the death of a gay dancer", even for me it sounded a bit random, but I didn't come up with something better yet.…

• on In 1993, a frustrated editor-in-chief living a double life in a conservative, perfect-looking town, is struggling to find his truth. 

  Thank you very much, Odie. Take care.