After reading a page from a spell book an incorrigible boy discovers a cursed princess trapped in a tree in his backyard. He must break the spell and save his father from his new girlfriend, the Witch.

The Weeping Willow (Revised)
(Kids cartoon/animation)

12 reviews

Andrew Bates Penpusher · 270 pts

Hi Tony
Nice work, thanks for the feedback.

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

Hi B8C --

Love this idea -- feel your pain as I've has a bit of a play and it's been quite a task to formulate into a succinct logline -- fwiw, below is my shot:

"A lonely boy discovers a fairy-tale princess stuck up a condemned tree at his local park and must set her free by destroying the witch that put her there? his Dad?s new beau."

I changed him from 'incorrigible' to lonely as I'm not sure how 'incorrigible' could relate to his goal -- regardless, best of luck with it... very cool :)

Andrew Bates Penpusher · 270 pts

Sigh...this is getting a little frustrating. I can see it, just have trouble finding the correct words that work.
I'll sleep on in for a week or so and come back hopefully with some new ideas, I appreciate all the feedback, thank-you.