After getting an unusual feedback in his survey, an editor in chief gets involved with the underground network of renegade AI

title “infamous”
set in the time of an early AI era, the protagonist is the EIC of a digital newspaper
he conducts online reviews to get to know people and AI better
and one day he is confused by one particular feedback..

5 reviews

Foxtrot25 Summitry · 17,380 pts

OT for a moment.

This short reminded me of your story:

https://youtu.be/24kRv1c0PiU

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

Agreed with all the above notes.

A few more little things worth thinking about are the descriptions "...in his survey..." and "...gets involved...".

It's not clear what survey you're referring to and how or why it is so important to the main character. I thought an editor in chief of a newspaper (digital or print) would pick reporters and edit stories so it's not clear why he or she care so much about some survey.

Secondly, as 'getting involved' could mean any number of things, the logline doesn't explain what he or she will do in the story - best to be clear and specific when describing the main action in a logline.

Foxtrot25 Summitry · 17,380 pts

Agreed, this is missing a lot. "Early AI era" isn't something the average viewer will relate to. Maybe in a few decades, who knows. AI is a topic that's been beaten to death for a while now. What's new to add? If you created some sort of underground element, that should be the focus. But what's the goal?