wind

806 points

1,694 points to Mentor

8 loglines
13 reviews

Loglines

After pledging his eyes posthumous, a highschool nerd must evade fatal attacks from a blind cameraman (on a hunt for matching doner)

March 23, 2019
when his highschool bully returns, a stuck-in-home-town loser must prove his competence by kicking his ass in the duel he proposed and save his family name

April 24, 2018
When planetary gods disagree on each other’s decisions of “universal laws”, An Earth God engages in a divine war against the biased laws for his claim in the new world

April 20, 2018
After a rape victim loses in court from the suspect?s influential family, she emerges as the leader of “broken”, a group of similar cases prepared to bring justice by necessary evil

April 10, 2018
When a fragile single girl wins a holiday vacation at 28, she has 3 weeks to go into a meaningful relationship or risk relapsing into depression

March 29, 2018
After getting an unusual feedback in his survey, an editor in chief gets involved with the underground network of renegade AI

January 11, 2018
After his father’s second marriage, a teenage boy learns to navigate his new life, only to discover his stepmom’s a narcissist..

January 7, 2018
A guy walks in a bar to find himself in the middle of a heist.

January 3, 2018

Recent reviews

on The story of the radical writer John Reed, eye-witness to the Russian revolution, the only American to be buried in the Kremlin.

Great job! Shouldn't you post the plotting logline here though, & suggest the pitching logline in the review section, just saying..
on A sheriff is visited by Federal agents who are hunting an alien that has crashed in the hills ? an alien that can shape shift into any form. One by one people disappear and he must find and kill the creature to save his town.

Who is the protagonist? The sheriff or one of the agents? Writing it from his POV will be helpful. Is "shapeshifting" an important detail in relation to the role or event or goal? Is "crashing in the hills" important? Or…
on When a group of people commits suicide after watching his psychological movies, an alcoholic director who can predict his possible futures must escape from a secret government who wants to kill him, thinking that he is a threat to our society.

I second variable. Apart from the fundamental loopholes, a better-active-goal will be helpful Predicting future does not create conflict ...and always hard to pull off successfully I'd like to add...."psychological movies" doesn't help Neither does his being an "Alcoholic"...
on After losing his captcha, a tone deaf scientist must prove himself human in a music duel, or slave his life in an AI camp

>>>slave his life in an AI camp Your protag could be one of the many scientists monitoring this AI labour camp I agree. if the AI are replicant sorts, proving himself better musician than a clone is an interesting turing…
on When the catholic church misunderstand his intentions, a simple devout have to endure the aggravating opposition if he is to fulfill his vow. –The given word

sounds fun Your review post reads more "visual" than the logline you posted originally. You might wanna incorporate more tangible goals than "misunderstanding intentions" or enduring aggravating opposition" or "fulfilling vow"
on A couple take up rock climbing to work out their trust issues, but when they witness a murder half way up a 200 meter cliff, they become the killers next targets and must work together to get out alive.

It sounds thrilling and very visual Is it a short story logline? because it lacks the fuel for a feature length film (It will however work good as a climax to some full length film on your mind)
on Dear fellow writers, I wanted to share with you the good news about the release of my latest little project – a comedy web series titled God’s 17. You can check out our latest episode on our website: www.gods17.com

loved it!
on After his egg family joins the “high class vegetarians”–due to his proposed thesis–Scrambled Jr. must resolve the growing vengeance of non-vegetables towards the privileges of being a vegetable

you could start your logline with: In a world where the vegetables and the non-vegetables have differing social classes... hope it helps
on After filling a lawsuit against a mammoth corporation, an ambitious environmentalist learns that the man representing them is the same guy with whom she had once _______

the second scenario won't go, If they had the most honest relationship and still won't see each other to the point that meeting him in such a role acts as your inciting event then they had some trouble which they…
on After his father’s second marriage, a teenage boy learns to navigate his new life, only to discover his stepmom’s a narcissist..

I was thinking about comedy Also could the subplot be "him trying to find his biological mother"?
on A young girl possessed by a Demon, writes an epic in which she demonstrates the Demon as her God, Christ, because he is harmless and inspirational.

Writes an epic isn't a compelling enough verb for me to watch the film Are we supposed to sit with the popcorns while she "writes"
on When raped near to her children, a beautiful widow turns the tables on her attacker revealing she is an ancient harpy raising her young.

If she's beautiful or not.. what changes?
on pls comment on it

why "impenetrable"?