With the Ragnarok coming, a cursed young prince, alone among his enemies, seeks salvation through searing visions to save his starfaring empire while two Special Affairs agents, with an intense blood feud between their clans, must solve an intergalactic conspiracy to prevent their planet from losing its fragile sovereignty.

by t3xx3r Logliner · 422 pts 196 views

1 review

Mike Pedley Singularity · 51,300 pts

Way too much going on. Simplify. Focus on your protagonist, what's the inciting incident, why does this upset the balance and how does the prince seek to correct it.

There seems to be two completely separate stories going on. Why?? There's no obvious connection between the two plots.

Again, simplify.