3 reviews
Agreed with Richiev and DPG.
The plot isn't clear, what specific event motivates him and what exactly is he motivated to do?
>>>but he realizes that his advice to them won?t work.
FADE OUT to the? CREDIT ROLL? -- Is that how the story ends?? Or is it the inciting incident for a plot to follow?
If the former, a logline should never give away how the story ends.? If the latter, then what becomes his objective goal as a result?
What is the goal of the lead character?
(I just re-read this. Does the lead character want to become a professional writer? Or does his patients? The first time I read the logline it seemed as if the patients wanted to become professional writers but now I am not so sure that is what you meant)