A timid, admin clerk reluctantly chooses to be the only stable friend of an erratic, homeless woman she had idolised back when they were School Captain.

Caught Between A Rock and No Place

3 reviews

Gaenhart Penpusher · 186 pts

Untying the knot and fitting this into the suggested logline?template, you'd come up with something like :

When an erratic, homeless woman?turns out to be the old School Captain she idolised,?a timid, admin clerk must become the tower of strength the woman needs.

Michael Pulliam Penpusher · 1 pts

This idea seems promising but is a little thin on content.

A few good questions to ask yourself:
--What does the main character want? (This can illuminate why she's reluctant.)
--What's in her way? (this is a great method for hooking readers.)
--How can I give the the logline as much momentum as possible?

From the logling, it's not really clear where the story is going. Consider: "When a timid admin clerk suddenly becomes the only stable friend of an erratic homeless person, she unravels the haunting story of how her high-school idol fell from grace."

CraigDGriffiths Singularity · 20,463 pts

This is a scenario, what is a character goal? That would be a story. Being a friend is a noble thing but is demonstrated by action. These actions would be the story which is the goal.

Hope this helps.