A marked-for-death outlaw rekindles old Dixie Mafia blood feuds after returning to the rogue barrier island of Vengeance on a mission to reclaim what?s his and kill the dirty motherfucker who gunned him down, stole his girl, and built a cocaine empire in the lawless coastal town he once called home.

Angels of Vengeance Vol. 1: Dirty Motherfucker

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Huston Tronnes 0 pts

And by the way, thank you all for your feedback. I know this certainly isn't a movie for everyone, kind of a niche market project, but the input does help.

Huston Tronnes 0 pts

Really, the inciting incident is the return to a hometown where he already has bad blood. His motivation is that his girl is getting weary of life on the road as a drifting grifter and her ex comes with a job with a big enough score that they can get the hell out and escape to a private island or wherever. She essentially gives him the ultimatum, take this job or I'm out. So he takes the job. They pull it successfully when the ex double crosses him at the deal (and her too, albeit unwittingly) So now shot and left for dead, he has to fight to take back what's his and get revenge in a town where old enemies are already lining up to kill him. It's certainly not short on conflict, though I do need to take care that the plot doesn't get too convoluted between old and new enemies (that do end up working in tandem). This is definitely in the vein of a Machete type movie. It's supposed to be fun, capitalize on the sex and violence draw and not take itself too seriously while also posing questions about blood being thicker than water, forgiveness, etc.

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

I still don't see the inciting incident's (job offer) significance in the life of the protagonist and the reason it motivated him.

From my understanding he is convinced to do a job in his home town then he goes to do it but is double crossed. From this I take that him being double crossed is the inciting incident and not the job offer or convincing him to do the job.

As such better to start the story with him being double crossed then describe the MC and his action against the antagonist.

Hope this helps.